Below is the final edit of our thriller opening.
Final Edit - Focus Group
The following feedback is of my thriller opening from my fellow peers, put together from a focus group.
The following feedback is of my thriller opening from my fellow peers, put together from a focus group.
Feedback from Paige Overton (peer):
In the opening thriller 'Dead Air' I particularly liked the use of black and white effects on the screen. This straight away gives a creepy feel to the opening. The use of lots of different shots is a good way in showing the actress's different points of view, one minute she sees nothing, yet in the next shot we (the audience) can see the ghost. This was a great way in creating tension throughout the opening as we slightly sympathize for the actress. I like the way that the ghost is wearing all black, the directors of the opening have clearly thought through what the colour black represents and have used it well when dressing the ghost. The only negative criticism I have is that i would of liked to of heard human diagetic sound throughout the opening sequence. Other than that I really enjoyed dead air and it gave me the thrill a thriller should give you.
Feedback from Tanya Steele (student):
I felt it was scary. It had all the right elements of a thriller, made me really tense. It was dark, a good effect for a thriller and set the mood. The sound effects are really good and emphasises the more dramatic moments of the thriller.
Feedback from Mr Haycocks (teacher):
Titles could be smaller and more discreetly placed with more attention to type face. Sound effects were severely lacking recorded sound and the final shot of the antagonist was too long, and should have faded to black immediately. Excellent use of camera language, very atmospheric in it's use of lighting, excellently directed/acted and the right length. It ticks all the boxes of the codes and conventions of thrillers.
Feedback from Lily Robinson (peer):
I liked the different shots that were used in this thriller, the way that in some shots you could see the girl and some you couldn't showed that she was either a ghost or in Sophie's imagination, without making it look too obvious or tacky. Also the music was really well put together and fitted very well with the shots. It did make me feel very tense and the build up was just right, it wasn't over dramatic and it was very professionally edited. The only constructive criticism I would give would be, the actors could have had a little more expression in their faces, for example the ghost maybe could have had her head tilted to the ground and looking up to the girl. I think this would have made more of an impact when the flashing images of her appeared. Other than that I thought it was very well put together and it had a professional finish.
Feedback from Tim Davies (peer):
The sound used within this piece works very well because it is atmospheric and has inconsistent elements. This therefore creates an unpredictability about the opening. The sound is dark and moody which collaborates with the image, which has been edited nicely with darkened edges, overall producing a dark and mysterious theme. The overall idea is good, the shot of the actress trying to open the locked door is effective as this idea of being trapped would be scary to viewers.
Feedback from Tanya Steele (student):
I felt it was scary. It had all the right elements of a thriller, made me really tense. It was dark, a good effect for a thriller and set the mood. The sound effects are really good and emphasises the more dramatic moments of the thriller.
Feedback from Mr Haycocks (teacher):
Titles could be smaller and more discreetly placed with more attention to type face. Sound effects were severely lacking recorded sound and the final shot of the antagonist was too long, and should have faded to black immediately. Excellent use of camera language, very atmospheric in it's use of lighting, excellently directed/acted and the right length. It ticks all the boxes of the codes and conventions of thrillers.
Feedback from Lily Robinson (peer):
I liked the different shots that were used in this thriller, the way that in some shots you could see the girl and some you couldn't showed that she was either a ghost or in Sophie's imagination, without making it look too obvious or tacky. Also the music was really well put together and fitted very well with the shots. It did make me feel very tense and the build up was just right, it wasn't over dramatic and it was very professionally edited. The only constructive criticism I would give would be, the actors could have had a little more expression in their faces, for example the ghost maybe could have had her head tilted to the ground and looking up to the girl. I think this would have made more of an impact when the flashing images of her appeared. Other than that I thought it was very well put together and it had a professional finish.
Feedback from Tim Davies (peer):
The sound used within this piece works very well because it is atmospheric and has inconsistent elements. This therefore creates an unpredictability about the opening. The sound is dark and moody which collaborates with the image, which has been edited nicely with darkened edges, overall producing a dark and mysterious theme. The overall idea is good, the shot of the actress trying to open the locked door is effective as this idea of being trapped would be scary to viewers.
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